I like this page. The anatomy is brilliant and the colors bend very well with the background. The only thing that aren't appealing for my eye ((-Meh.)) are the dialog boxes. For me, they just don't bend with the background or character. It kind of takes the attention from the art, you know what I mean? Like, if you quickly look at the page, the first thing to catch your attention will be it, THEN the character & background. I think you could try making it a bit less 'showy' by lowering the outline and trying to bend it a bit more with the rest of the picture. Other than that, it's all good. Hope to see more of it.
well arent dialog boxes meant to be for dialog and not to "look pretty and artistic" ? otherwise it would be not practical for reading. Simple speech bubbles are better to read. Not sure what you mean with bending. or you meant blending?
Blending. That's what I meant. This keyboard makes me miss some keys from time to time. I didn't mean it by trying to make it look "pretty and artistic" like you said, but yes to make it less showy like I said, and as simple as possible. It seems like the character has that specific color for his speech bubbles? Is it just for character or does that mean he talks differently?
But yeah, the thing about the dialog boxes is that they give the impression of a red ladybug in a grey, dark, rainy scenario.
What I meant about the red ladybug wasn't really about the color of the speech bubble, more about how it takes the attention to itself a little bit too much. And thinking about what you said there, I'd rather have it a simple white even for the main character(s). The design of the feline itself and how attention you give to it already speak out loud it's one of the mains. I believe it wouldn't be needed any more 'specialness' for it. I, as a crazed comic reader, and an artist myself, like to pay attention to every detail. And I believe you do too. Maybe you've stumbled upon Marvel comics? Their speech bubbles are good. Simple. That's the best way to read a comic because you almost don't give a flip about what they're saying: your eyes just want to stick with the character and follow it around the pages. However, the way you make your speech bubbles look make them seem like they don't really belong to the image nor that they were made by you, actually. It's like on one of those online comic makers where they are ready and cartoon-ish and you just add in text and put it next to the character. If you draw 'em, maybe you could make 'em look the style of your drawing? It'd maybe take a bit more of time, but it's just a little, and then it all would be perfect. Make the borders thin and the text as small and simple as could be without you having to reach closer to read it. And I think that would be good. Every comic is a piece of art itself. From the cover to the last pages, it all must have harmony and work well together. If not, it will just look like things don't belong.
But yes, it's just a critic. If you want to stick with it the way it already is and have been since the start of the comic because you believe it's better, and I'm talking nonsense, it's completely your choice.
Also, for the next page ((34)), the way the jar fell and didn't make noise is a bit weird, and the perspective on the last panel makes it a bit not understandable. Also, the red light coming from that object often does and does not reflect on the surroundings like it should. Or maybe the light coming from it does oscillate?
thanks for the critique, i will think about it its a bit weird because the speechbubbles are already very simple as those standard speechbubbles. Only difference is that I made them reddish for this specific character. You said I should make them fit the comic style and the artwork which is a bit confusing because most of the comic tips i've read they suggest simple speechbubbles like in do rather do a fancy one. I think the only reason the red speech bubble is distracting is because of the background color, because the underworld is greyscale. But back when its in a coloured world I think it will be a different story. So I think I may keep the red colour but will scale the size of the speechbubbles down so theyre not overwhelming like in this page.
Also keep in mind I try not to add too much of detail in the comic pages because if it gets printed, most of these details get lost anyway. Its meant to tell a story in the end.
This is very interesting so far! I just happened upon this comic and was like "Have I seen Night before...?" I'm pretty sure I happened across your work in the past. But anyway, I hope you keep this comic up!
I think you've also gotten yourself another watcher... XD
it seriously butthurts u when a comment left under a work of urs is not containing a wet fangirl splash. well, working machine or not, why do u even leave promises of updating this shit each friday when u do not?
I am not promising anything. Its not my fault that you didn't read my journal entry about change of schedule. Hence why it says now "soon" and not "next friday" . There is a difference between being a dick and leaving critique. So apparently you are the only butthurt one here that can't even wait a week or two for a next update without even using your common sense and think that maybe some artists have better things to do in their lives like school, internship and social life. I am not forcing you to read, so if you think this is shit, you can go somewhere else because I am not planning to just drop my school just to satisfy douchebags. Honestly I don't care if you don't like it.
well its not about if they read it or not. but its a shame they do not use a bit of common sense and realize I do this in my free time. Which is very little, since the comming months is gonna be terribly busy for me with driving exam, graduation exam and a surgery on my stomach. And yet I do this whole comic project on my own. Which includes scripting, storyboarding, concepting, layouting and drawing the pages. :[ oh and I have school and internship through the week. and social life in the weekend. oh oh oh and commission work! Yep lets complain away. How dare I to take so long on comic pages! *sarcasm*
But I gues a lot of comic artists have to deal with such people. I looked at off-white comics and the complaining for moar pages is amazing.